Commentary script

Question 3 - What have you learnt from your audience feedback?

For our pitch feedback we were told that our haunted concept worked well as we had planned to show that the girl is dead but still show memories of the couple from when she was alive.  We were also told that we had a wide variety of possible footage to add into our video of the couple together, the guy mourning the loss of his girlfriend and lip syncing shots of the artist, which we had demomstrated in our storyboard. We were then told to research how we will show that some shots are in the past and some in the present so the music video doest become too confusing.
When we recieved our rough cut feedback, we were told that we had fitted the goowins points in well as we had added a lot of strong links between the lyrics and visuals for example when the song lyrics say "The steps on the stairs arent really there" we did a shot of stairs. We were told that to improve we should exaggerate the black and white effect when showing the memories of the couple to emphasize the difference of the past and present.
When we recieved our final cut feedback we were told that our editing was effective and created a strong ghostly feel although some people felt that some of our shots were too long even though we had purposely done this to show the emotion of the artist in relation to the lyrics. We were also told that our props, costumes and lighting were effective, all showing a ghostly but romantic feel.
We also recieved feedback for our magazine and digipak. We had a screenshot of a tree from our video on our covers and were told to add a picture of the couple on the front but fade the girl into the background slightly to give the haunted feel. We were also given the idea of adding the artist into the background but having very faded to give a "where's wally effect" .